I. Initial Claim and Devil’s Advocate
The initial claim in Owen’s Draft for “The Sphere of Moral Concern” is that humans are morally superior to other creatures because we are more complex than other beings.
II. Is objection compelling? Can it be stronger? General Feedback?
I think this is a very good objection. Right now, there are many different points against the original claim but overall this argument can be stronger if it is connected by one main theme that connects everything. For example, the current points are evidence for the argument against the claim but Owen can use one main point to refocus the argument like the different qualities in various species. This is already part of the argument but it will be stronger if the claim is directly questioned.
III. Clarificatory Question
It looks like the main argument in this essay is that all beings are connected by organic material. Is this the guiding theme for the devil’s advocate position or is it just general information that relates to the main arguments you make?
IV. Suggestion for Improvement
If you can claim what specific issues will be discussed in the end of first paragraph, then it will be easier to follow those issues throughout the essay.